Vocal Coach Comments:
It’s nice that this is an original song recorded at a live gig. This style certainly works for you and you have a strong tone with real potential. However, you need to ‘sell’ the song more vocally and visually. It’s a little bit flat in pitch quite a lot of the time, but you could easily rectify this by putting in much more energy into your performance. It’s too static and you’ve also got your right arm across your stomach a lot of the time. This is what I call a “closed gate” gesture and says to your audience “Don’t look at me”. Please open that “gate” and let the audience in
This is an original song my husband and I wrote. I wrote the lyrics, he wrote the music (we make a good team that way!) There were a few flubs here and there, but live is what it is!